If We Were to Edit This Statement

2013-02-12 — Good Characters (Leave a message)

President Obama issued a statement on Lunar New Year 2013 a few days ago. The White House also provided the statement in Chinese. If we were asked to evaluate or edit it, we would recommend the following changes:



Notes:

We recommend the transliteration of Michelle to be “蜜雪兒” or a Chinese name that can be easily identified as a female name. The current transliteration “米歇尔” is usually perceived as a male name.

For “people,” we recommend “各位” and “民眾” instead of “所有人” and “人民” because they sound more personal and not bureaucratic.

We changed some terms to make the statement more polished and fluent in Chinese.

Original English:

Michelle and I send our warmest wishes to all those who will be celebrating the Lunar New Year this Sunday, February 10th. Here in America and around the world, people of Asian and Pacific Islander descent will welcome the Year of the Snake. In Chinese tradition, the snake represents wisdom, and a thoughtful approach to tackling the challenges before us – principles that I hope will continue to guide us as we perfect our union and create a more just and equal future for every American. Our challenges may be great, but our diversity and the traditions that thrive here give us the strength to meet them. To everyone celebrating the Lunar New Year, I wish you peace, prosperity and good health and fortune.

The original White House translation:

米歇尔和我向将在2月10日星期天欢庆农历新年的所有人致以最热情的祝福。在美国和世界各地的亚太裔人民将迎接蛇年的到来。按照中国的传统,蛇代表智慧和以审慎的方式去应对面前的挑战——我希望我们将继续以这些原则为指导,努力完善我们的联邦,为所有美国人创造更公正平等的未来。挑战也许艰巨,但我们这里蓬勃兴旺的多元化及各种传统赋予了我们迎接挑战的力量。我祝欢庆农历新年的各位平安健康、好运荣昌。

Our edited version:

蜜雪儿和我仅向将在2月10日星期天欢庆农历春节的各位致以最温情的祝福。我们美国和世界各地的亚太裔民众期盼蛇年的到来。依据中国的传统,蛇代表着智慧和以审慎的方式去面对眼前的挑战。本人祈愿我们持续遵循相同的原则,努力使我们的联邦更加完美,并为所有的美国人创造一个更公正、更平等的未来。我们所面对的挑战也许相当艰巨,但这里丰盛的多元文化及传统,赋予我们克服挑战的实力。我敬祝欢庆农历新年的您:平安健康、好运荣昌。

In Traditional Chinese:

蜜雪兒和我僅向將在2月10日星期天歡慶農歷春節的各位致以最溫情的祝福。我們美國和世界各地的亞太裔民眾期盼蛇年的到來。依據中國的傳統,蛇代表著智慧和以審慎的方式去面對眼前的挑戰。本人祈願我們持續遵循相同的原則,努力使我們的聯邦更加完美,並為所有的美國人創造一個更公正、更平等的未來。我們所面對的挑戰也許相當艱巨,但這裡豐盛的多元文化及傳統,賦予我們克服挑戰的實力。我敬祝歡慶農歷新年的您:平安健康、好運榮昌。

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